Bad Sentence: I work at Community Development Professionals.
This sentence should be more developed. It sounds to short and brief.
Good Sentence: If I were not performing my job, payroll would go slower and IT would require a professional so that the other employees would be able to perform their tasks in a timely fashion.
This sentence shows good use of rhetoric and is a good way to convince someone in regards to my point of view.
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